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marycatelli ([personal profile] marycatelli) wrote2020-05-11 10:52 pm

looping back

Revised a passage yesterday

Realized I could make it more complex and a challenge after I turned the computer off. And that's definitely better as it leads up to the climax.

SO -- started to revise again.

Realized that it would not just add scenes but require massively reworking the next scene. Or possibly tearing it apart to get the vital information in a new and much longer scene.

Big question: should it happen in the golden evening, or after sundown, when I could put some nice chiaroscuro descriptions to dramatize their moment of despair?