marycatelli (
marycatelli) wrote2024-08-20 11:36 pm
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missing a scene
Revision was stymied, but finally, I figured out the issue: I need to throw in a scene. To make it very clear that two scenes didn't happen, bumpity-bump, in short order.
Which means it has to not just separate them but serve some purpose. Hmmm -- moving the queen and her consort about -- deal with soldiers -- oh, yeah --
Underscoring the problem that the second scene will fix. It's alluded to in the first scene, but it does fit in with the dealing with soldiers part.