watch your language

Down below in comments, I mentioned that people wouldn't talk about their leaders in most historical societies.  They would talk about their rulers -- which, incidentially, is what these people really are.  They are "leaders" only metaphorically.

That's something to keep an eye on.  You want to write in English, and probably not even forsoothly, but there are words that will pitch your more knowledgeable readers right out of the story.  And even with your less knowledgeable readers will not pick up on how smoothly you sidled your world-building into your style unless you actually do sidle it in.
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