South

South by Patrick McDonnell

A sweet little wordless tale.

Birds migrate south, except that one falls asleep and loses his flock.  Mooch points him in the right direction, but when that's too much for the bird, he leads him on southward, through the city, through even some snow --

foreshadowing the questions

Sometimes revision turns up a lack of foreshadowing.

You didn't give a character a skill he will need; you didn't expound enough on his hatred to make the reader believe he would betray the cause for it; you didn't make it clear what the gem's powers are; you didn't give the law that will govern the consequences of his actions.

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