A Bride's Story Vol 8

A Bride's Story Vol 8 by Kaoru Mori

The first chapter is overflow from volume 7, which I found weak, but the rest is about the aftermath of volume 6.

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adventures in plot devices

I set out the hero on the first page of his story, and I realize I don't introduce the adventure of the forest until the second page, and there's no real incident on the first.

I realize I have a natural point for the heroine to reveal something to the hero except that -- he has to learn it later, when he has a powerful reaction to it. There are a couple of things that might shut her up but only if properly deployed.

I put in that something the heroine has to do is a test, and she won't be allowed to study unless she passes, and I realize this has to be mentioned before half way through the test. She would be positively threatened with it.

sigh The things you miss.