telling transition

[marycatelli]

Not all third-person points-of-view are the same.  Even within the same work.

The big issue is tightness of POV.  All these things say the same thing, if not in the same level of detail:

• She was extremely angry, completely losing sight of the situation and pondering violence at his expression.
• She fumed, glaring at him, and thought of slapping that silly grin off his face
• She couldn't believe what a bastard he was being.   If she slapped him one, she thought, he would loose that look.
• What a bastard!  A good slap across his face -- he earned it -- would wipe that look off his face

Some stories can pull off everything at the same level, but there are advantages and disadvantages.  A very tight POV gets us into the character's shoes, but by the same token, tends to require a high level of detail.

You can't, however, just hop from one to the other, because it leave the reader disoriented. 

The arrogant bastard!  She'd like to see how he liked what he was doing being done to him.  Jill was growing deeply angry.  Wringing his neck like a chicken -- he'd deserved it.

confuses because the third paragraph is an outside view.  It gets worse when a very tight comment is dropped inside an otherwise loose paragraph:

Miranda and Julia also went to Merrymount.  Every soul in the city who could left to escape the oppressive heat.  Merrymount was the most darling house in the world.  They enjoyed it very much.

because "the most darling house" reads like the opinion of the omniscient narrator, not like the characters'.

The place where I see this most often is in an opening paragraph of omniscient stage setting -- not bad in itself, as long as it's engaging -- and plop! right in the POV of the character who could not have made the judgments in the opening.  It can be bad if the character could have, because then we are not sure it was reliably given to us, but it can be a serious jolt if he could not have.

Comments

[marycatelli]

Yes, that's the way to transition, smoothly -- although I'd put a "they found" in the "most darling house" sentence.

[houseboatonstyx.livejournal.com]

I agree. It's a little abrupt as is.

[houseboatonstyx.livejournal.com]

Of course you can also drop into speech, or more or less.

Miranda and Julia also went to Merrymount. Every soul in the city who could left to escape the oppressive heat. Merrymount was the most darling house in the world, Miranda opined to anyone who would listen. The girls enjoyed it very much, especially the weekend parties. One Saturday night when they were dressing for dinner, Julia said, "/////".

Hm, that loses the steady zooming, but I like it: sort of a turn of the century pace.

[marycatelli]

So you can! A loose POV has a lot more need of tags to ensure that thoughts and evaluations are traced correctly to their source, but there's all sorts of ways to do that.