further flowery fluff
Jul. 23rd, 2020 11:10 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
marycatelliWhen I have established that the heroine likes flowers and gardens. . .
When I send her through the forest where there are glades filled with wildflowers. . .
THEN -- no matter how desperately she is looking for something (and she's not phenomenally desperate, too early in the plot), she IS going to notice the flowers.
Perhaps I will emphasize how she regards them as a distraction, albeit a very tempting one, but she has to notice them. The passage is just not flowery enough.
When I send her through the forest where there are glades filled with wildflowers. . .
THEN -- no matter how desperately she is looking for something (and she's not phenomenally desperate, too early in the plot), she IS going to notice the flowers.
Perhaps I will emphasize how she regards them as a distraction, albeit a very tempting one, but she has to notice them. The passage is just not flowery enough.