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Mary Catelli's Erraticly Updated and Exceedingly Ill-Organized Journal
being chiefly about the written word
How to Write a Sentence
How to Write a Sentence
Feb
.
29th
,
2012
08:34 pm
marycatelli
That old masterpiece, "The Eye of Argon" gets pressed into duty as a means of instructing in sentence writing.
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2012-03-01 01:47 am (UTC)
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The end result was nearly as bad as the start - just in different ways. I think the sentence hit its peak around part six or so.
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Date:
2012-03-01 02:02 am (UTC)
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marycatelli
Arguable, I suppose. I would not have written the last sentence. At the very least, I would have broken it into several.
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Date:
2012-03-01 03:30 am (UTC)
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Me are barbarian named Grunt (obviously encumbered and overgrown with thews of steel) and defiantly not liking so much using of gerunding. But definitely a nice explanation of what to start looking for!
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Date:
2012-03-01 04:06 am (UTC)
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marycatelli
Gerunding will keep your sentences loaded with verbs!
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Date:
2012-03-01 04:09 am (UTC)
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...verbing verbing verbing, keep those
trucks
no
dogies
erm paragraphs verbing
rolling
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Date:
2012-03-01 04:17 am (UTC)
From:
marycatelli
And the verbing goes verbing along!
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Date:
2012-03-01 05:30 am (UTC)
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alivion.livejournal.com
Verbing weirds language.
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Date:
2012-03-01 12:26 pm (UTC)
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marycatelli
Better than weirdifying it!
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Date:
2012-03-01 05:34 am (UTC)
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alivion.livejournal.com
I find his end result far better than the original, if only because I can figure out what is going on.
For myself, I simply wouldn't write anything which involves barbarians (massive or otherwise)
rippling
in any way.
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Date:
2012-03-01 05:40 am (UTC)
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Date:
2012-03-01 12:27 pm (UTC)
From:
marycatelli
Figuring out what's going on does help.
Me, I think all references to the barbarian's build should be established
before
the fight because no one has the time to think about it during it.
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Date: 2012-03-01 05:34 am (UTC)For myself, I simply wouldn't write anything which involves barbarians (massive or otherwise) rippling in any way.
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Date: 2012-03-01 12:27 pm (UTC)Me, I think all references to the barbarian's build should be established before the fight because no one has the time to think about it during it.